Delete section on case studies because you are repeating yourself.
Section on polishing camera skills. You need to be more specific. Upload screen shots (at least two from your prelim Task) and 2 or 3 screen shots from your thriller as examples of improvements in your camera skills.
Locations: A screen shot from your prelim task and 2 from your thriller as examples of how you have become more ambitious in choosing locations that add appeal whilst also indicating your film opening is a thriller.
If your film isn't on your blog then do this at school.
Another point avoid repetition particularly re researched films, also capital letters for films title, for example Heavenly Creatures. And re this film you could say how the focus on the deviant behaviour of two school girls who murder one of the girl's mothers inspired your idea of focusing on the deviant behaviour of a school girl.
At present Level 3 C/B Endeavour to remove any repetition. With each task you learned endeavour to include a specific example and avoid repetition.
Delete section on case studies because you are repeating yourself.
ReplyDeleteSection on polishing camera skills. You need to be more specific. Upload screen shots (at least two from your prelim Task) and 2 or 3 screen shots from your thriller as examples of improvements in your camera skills.
Locations: A screen shot from your prelim task and 2 from your thriller as examples of how you have become more ambitious in choosing locations that add appeal whilst also indicating your film opening is a thriller.
If your film isn't on your blog then do this at school.
Another point avoid repetition particularly re researched films, also capital letters for films title, for example Heavenly Creatures. And re this film you could say how the focus on the deviant behaviour of two school girls who murder one of the girl's mothers inspired your idea of focusing on the deviant behaviour of a school girl.
At present Level 3 C/B Endeavour to remove any repetition. With each task you learned endeavour to include a specific example and avoid repetition.
Very well organised Harriet.