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1) Could you please correct capital letters at beginning of sentences, for names of films and name of people and cities.
2) The worms eye shot of Noodles that you have under the section on camera angles is from the film "Once Upon a Time in America" not The Third Man. Could you please correct. 3) Ethnicity I suggest you remove as it is repetitive and instead add a section on how your film reflects anxieties about cyber bullying amongst children and teenagers. Thus your film explores a contemporary problem. You could quickly research this on Google and add a link.
With revisions a confident Level 3, B grade with a splendid reference to Alpha Papa well done for including that Harriet.
Quick revisions before uploading onto Label G321 Evaluation:
ReplyDelete1) Could you please correct capital letters at beginning of sentences, for names of films and name of people and cities.
2) The worms eye shot of Noodles that you have under the section on camera angles is from the film "Once Upon a Time in America" not The Third Man. Could you please correct.
3) Ethnicity I suggest you remove as it is repetitive and instead add a section on how your film reflects anxieties about cyber bullying amongst children and teenagers. Thus your film explores a contemporary problem. You could quickly research this on Google and add a link.
With revisions a confident Level 3, B grade with a splendid reference to Alpha Papa well done for including that Harriet.
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