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A couple of revisions if you have time:
1) Character's names...use capital letters please. Could you correct.
2) The two girls in Heavenly Creatures are not sisters, they are friends. The dark haired girl is the daughter of the mother who is murdered.
3) Challenging conventions: femme fatale, the girls do not fit into this category. They are school girls who may behave extraordinarily but they are quite ordinary girls school girls who become obsessive. Could you please revise...I can help you with this.
The femme fatale archetype, is usually glamorous, sophisticated, older, in thrillers frequently smokes and is worldly wise. These girls aren't! This was what is so shocking about their crime.
1) Spellings, keep a dictionary beside you when working on your case studies. You keep repeating the word guested and this is inappropriate, instead use "anticipates" or "gives a clue". 2) The women are not femme fatales who are glamorous, seductive and often devious. This is a mother taking her daughter and her daughter's friend out for a walk. In thrillers a convention is "extraordinary events happening to ordinary people". These are an ordinary threesome but the girls are obsessive by the idea that the girl's mother is trying to separate them, hence the murder. 3) Try to avoid repetition for example "idyllic setting". The setting is isolated, enclosed, trackless and of course such a setting can be a key convention of thriller films. Isolation in particular as homicides often happen in isolated areas or enclosed spaces where there are no witnesses, for example the murder of Eve in "Once Upon a Time in America"
Your case study indicates engagement but always do a spell check before uploading your case studies.
Well done for responding to advise re revisions. Harriet I suggest that you always write up an analysis on a word document so that any spelling or grammatical errors are highlighted for you to correct.
I am delighted you are keeping yourself up to date, this indicates ambition and commitment.
ReplyDeleteI'll assess your case studies within the next couple of days.
A couple of revisions if you have time:
1) Character's names...use capital letters please. Could you correct.
2) The two girls in Heavenly Creatures are not sisters, they are friends. The dark haired girl is the daughter of the mother who is murdered.
3) Challenging conventions: femme fatale, the girls do not fit into this category. They are school girls who may behave extraordinarily but they are quite ordinary girls school girls who become obsessive. Could you please revise...I can help you with this.
The femme fatale archetype, is usually glamorous, sophisticated, older, in thrillers frequently smokes and is worldly wise. These girls aren't! This was what is so shocking about their crime.
1) Spellings, keep a dictionary beside you when working on your case studies. You keep repeating the word guested and this is inappropriate, instead use "anticipates" or "gives a clue".
ReplyDelete2) The women are not femme fatales who are glamorous, seductive and often devious. This is a mother taking her daughter and her daughter's friend out for a walk. In thrillers a convention is "extraordinary events happening to ordinary people". These are an ordinary threesome but the girls are obsessive by the idea that the girl's mother is trying to separate them, hence the murder.
3) Try to avoid repetition for example "idyllic setting". The setting is isolated, enclosed, trackless and of course such a setting can be a key convention of thriller films. Isolation in particular as homicides often happen in isolated areas or enclosed spaces where there are no witnesses, for example the murder of Eve in "Once Upon a Time in America"
Your case study indicates engagement but always do a spell check before uploading your case studies.
Some proficient analysis, Level 3.
Well done for responding to advise re revisions. Harriet I suggest that you always write up an analysis on a word document so that any spelling or grammatical errors are highlighted for you to correct.
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